hello!
您好！
toward hua xishi, the flower of morning withered, to in the evening pick up comes. so good and vivid title, also be lu xun only your. but the beautiful ” of the withered of “ morning to you, appear and do not have so good. in my impression, your childhood is like is critically, and sweet memory is like however little little.
朝花夕拾，早晨凋零的花，到晚上捡起来。这么美好生动的书名，也只有是鲁迅您的了。但“早晨的凋零的花”对于您来说，似乎并没有那么美好。在我的印象里，您的童年好像都是批判，而温馨的回忆却好像少之又少。
impression is the deepest is you write " 5 chang are met " . i like this article most, understand easily because of this article not only, because let it,still be i have greatly feeling. ” often jumps over expected thing, always can bring endless disappointed ” to you, expected like you so long " 5 chang are met " ah, at the beginning i still think you had the joy that belongs to you eventually, doing not have those who think of is be broken into pieces entirely by a word of father however ——” goes taking your book, learn by heart to me, the back does not go out must not go looking meeting. ” this kind of flavor but bad to sufferred.( 作文 www.zuowenba.net )
印象最深刻的就是您写的《五猖会》。我最喜欢这篇文章，不仅因为这篇文章易懂，还是因为让它我深有感。”往往越期盼的东西，总能给你带来无尽的失望”，就像您期盼了那么久的《五猖会》呀，一开始我还以为您终于有了属于您的快乐了，没有想到的是却被父亲的一句话全部打碎——”去把你的书拿来，给我读熟，背不出不许去看会。”这种滋味可不好受了吧。
actually this kind of thing often happens on my body. once, mother agreed me obviously, let i and classmate go out to play. can arrive to drop chain suddenly again in the morning the following day, the pet phrase that used to often teach me: &when ldquo; your elder sister is so little like you, do not go out, you are good! ” although i at that time the grievance of bellyful, can not speak a word to come a long time. i write down so that i cry finally () but miserable. but mom did not let me go namely. nevertheless, fortunately i cry () too tired, tumble into bed, the thing of this one sadness went so.
其实这种事经常在我身上发生的。有一次，妈妈明明答应了我，让我和同学出去玩的。可以到第二天早上又突然掉链子，用了一只经常教育我的口头禅:“你姐姐像你这么小的时候，从来都不出去的，你倒好了!”即使我当时满肚子的委屈，可以半天没说出一句话来。我记得最后我哭的（得）可惨了。可妈妈就是没让我去。不过，好在我哭的（得）太累了，倒头就睡，这一件悲伤的事情就这样过去了。
say so, the disappointment in the life and sad too much really, we are indispensable their arrival, also cannot be fed up with parents. what can do is to want actively to receive as usual east the sun that rise. i think your life is dark probably, so ability can have a pair of eyes that watch night. but i hope you can look so that see light, look so that see, although be in darkness also can glisten star.
所以说，生活中的失望与难过真的太多了，我们不能避免他们的到来，也不能去讨厌父母。能做的就是要积极地去迎接照常东升的太阳。我想您的人生大概都是黑暗吧，所以才会有一双看夜的眼睛。但我希望你能看得见光明，看得见，即使在黑暗中也能闪闪发光星星。
your article is very good really nevertheless, beat the person's heart continuously, greet to you here.
不过您的文章真的很好，直击人的内心，在此向您致敬。
" toward hua xishi " reader
《朝花夕拾》的读者
young writer cited a few setbacks of lu xun gentleman, guide oneself a few setbacks, write the article particularly “ setback ” , but actually the life experience of the type of “ setback ” of lu xun gentleman is the implied meaning that gives him, but his life is not darkness, lu xun is render outstanding service and be famous, childhood of not better than accepted severe education, the article fundamental key of young writer is too sentimental, try to be narrated toward the angle with lively front, we can not be fed up with parents, we can be communicated with parental front, we cannot face a few setbacks, we are put, first openly him dredge mood, my study career is may inflexible, onefold be full of a setback, but the old practice that achievement young writer was using a character to tell about his right now, this sees the life that seems “ darkness ” and setback inner tube give us the sense that everybody grows namely. cheer. you are a child that has literal strength very much, the mood in noticing style or manner of writing next time is oriented.
小作者引用了鲁迅先生的一些挫折，导入自己的一些挫折，把文章写得特别“挫折”，但是其实鲁迅先生的“挫折”式的人生经历是给他的文章，但是他的人生不是黑暗的，鲁迅是功成名就的，最多是童年接受了严厉的教育，小作者的文章基调太伤感，试着往正面活泼的角度叙述，我们不可以讨厌父母，我们可以和父母正面沟通，我们面对不了一些挫折，我们就放一放，先正面疏导自己的情绪，我的学习生涯可能刻板、单一充满挫折，但是成就小作者在此时用文字讲述了自己的故事，这就是看似“黑暗”的人生和挫折里带给我们每个人成长的意义了。加油。你是个非常有文字功底的孩子，下次注意行文中的情绪导向。